When the world ends

i just thought of this yesterday and im just gonna type the first scene.

Scene 1
It all starts out when the Marines just defeated the covenent elites when there is the captain of the marines come and the elites shields are down and they cant fight no more. the captain says "it no use to try and defeat us we have drainded your shields took all of your weapons so theres nothing you pathetic excuse for an elite will not stop us!" the elite tries to stand up he goes "your wrong i can stop you with this!" and apears is a time bomb the elite says "theres no way to stop this bomb no cutting wires, no nothing! this bomb goes off in about 20 years from nowwhen this thing hits 0 it will become a massive black hole! Plus 1 thing you didnt take all of my weapons." the elite pulls out a sword "die you bitches!" after the elite killed the captain and his soldiers he takes his weapon and powers up his shields then calls for a ride a prowler come and he leaves the time bomb counting down


if i could get some more ideas this could be a great film

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My eyes burn from lack of periods!!!!!

lolol drifor

it's pretty good idea, kind of clique

ok from now on you show your ideas to someone to prof read ok? because you might have some good ideas if only you could explain and actually type them

unseen you have made a drastic change from being horrible with ideas, to ideas that actually have some potential and with a little bit of work, can be filmed quite well.
as driftor and dart said, just work on proofreading it or have someone else proof read it and they'll type it and put it on the site.